In “The Double Edge of Globalization”, Chanda’s (2007) illustrations about global-warming news claiming front-page attention globally and images of human suffering evoking our sympathy and support is use to imply that increase in global awareness to environmental degradation can stimulate responses from us to tackle these problems. However, this increase in awareness can actually decrease the chances that we will respond to such problems.
Based on personal experience, news on environmental degradation are ubiquitous in our everyday lives. Frequent exposure to such news has led to desensitization in many of us, gradually we become increasingly insensitive to such issues and therefore it is unlikely that we will respond to such issues.
Due to the hyperconnectivity of today’s world we are certain that many people are aware of environmental problems and we assume that others will take action. Thus, we absolve our responsibility towards environmental problems. This led to the phenomenon of “Diffusion of Responsibility” (Darley and Latané, 1968), causing a decrease in the amount of people actually taking action.
Increase in awareness to environmental degradation has led to a decrease in our sensitivity and responsibility towards environmental issues causing a dip in likelihood that we will respond to such problems.
Hi Chin Hwee,
ReplyDeleteHere are our suggestions;
First paragraph
1.If ‘illustrates’ is being used, ‘about’ is redundant.
2.However, we would choose not to use ‘illustrate in this sentence. Perhaps ‘highlights’ would have been a better choice.
3.We would also choose not to use ‘globally’ in the first sentence after the term ‘global warming’. The repetition throws us off.
4.The first sentence is too long. Sentence structure is terrible can be improved on as it does not flow.
5.Your second sentence is confusing. Perhaps ‘The increase in awareness may deter response rather than encourage.’
6.You will be clearer if you state whether you agree/disagree with chanda statement.
Third paragraph
1.Comma should come after ‘today’s world’ in the first sentence.
2.‘We absolve ourselves from the responsibilities of…’ in the second sentence.
3.‘This had led…’ in the third sentence.
4.Fantastic in-text citations.
Last paragraph
1.The jump between your last two paragraphs is abrupt.
2.Restructure your stand to link back to Chanda’: Increase in awareness does not necessarily have a great/positive impact on spurring us to undertake actions towards environmental issue. But rather…..
Your sentences structure could be improved. From your reader response, we assume you are talking about human behavior – how they react to the ‘increase in global awareness’ – so , perhaps you could mention this in the beginning.
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Sumin, Elizabeth, Naz